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17 miles from the
town I grew up in,
there was a river, and a
bridge
a hundred heart-jumps above it:

too-many-thousand
footsteps long,
with a walkway to the side that
didn't feel wide enough.

Cars would
VREEOOWMM
by at
59 miles-an-hour, as
with each nervous step, your feet
prayed to the concrete,

and cold wind would beat
at you between
green, rusted rails,
just to remind you how high up
you really were.



   Every once in a while,
   there would be news that
   someone had "jumped".   
                     
   

They'd
walked out to the middle
[or just where it looked high enough],
with the wind colder
than usual and the
concrete
feeling solid for once,

they'd put their hands on the
green-rust rails,
covered in lovers' etched
prayers to time,

they'd gripped tight onto it
as they lifted one leg,
then the other,
over to the unsafe side.

and they'd stood there, bent,
with their back to the
world, looking down
in terror,
but in hope.

  

   Sometimes they got talked down.
   Sometimes they didn't.      
                  
   

I did the math one day and
figured it took
6 . 7 4 6 1 seconds
for a human being to
drop
all that way
from top to bottom.

6 . 7 4 6 1 seconds
of panic and wind
ravaging your frame.
6 . 7 4 6 1 seconds
of double-guesses
and what-ifs.

And they said the terror killed most people
mid-flight, before the
body even
touched
the water.
when you thought about it
it was more of a
scared letting-go
than a jump.


```

. April 2011 .
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vivapo Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
I can't believe I found this poem today. A childhood friend of mine jumped off her balcony yesterday. I'll never know what went through her mind during those last seconds, but man, I hope there was something else underneath all the pain and fear... Maybe even hope. Thanks for writing this.
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Kiliann Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student Writer
I love this poem. It's so beautifully dark. The descriptions and the way you present everything make it feel like you're really there at the bridge.
Congratulations on the DD. You've earned it.
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Andrid-Darkbane Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is...amazing. Beautiful but depressing at the same time. The feeling of this poem is amazingly strong, and I could almost feel the weightlessness of falling. Very nice.
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erfdog10 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
hm... wow. this is seriously amazing. I wasn't sure where you were going with it, looking at the title... but... wow. this is impressive, no kidding. loved it.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student General Artist
Wowwwww..... it has the feel of a true story. :hug: It's amazingly good.
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toxichydramonster Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
this is soo sad and depressing. :C but so well writin
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Congratzplz Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student Writer
this is really beautiful
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:iconundivineintervention:
This poem is so powerful - the words and tone are like a quiet admission; the format is like someone leaning out from the rails.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredible. I really miss reading your words. It makes me happy to see that your incredible work is still getting attention. I wish you'd come back to dA but hope you're doing well.

Congrats on the DD. 

:heart:
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t33kai Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful ;'c
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FluffyLover1986 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
Well, as they say...

It's not the fall that kills you.
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MiriaGreyhaven Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful.
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MelanieTheMarkiplite Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very good! Congrats on the DD! :D
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014   Writer
Brilliant and thought-provoking piece :heart: Congrats on the well-deserved DD :clap:
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DeriveAnemone Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Chilling. Clap The spacing for '6.7461' gives it all the more impact.
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:iconbejaaa:
bejaaa Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
this is so amazing
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KyaniteArcher Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The last stanza... wow.
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
"the
concrete
feeling solid for once,"

was a nice touch.

Thanks for sharing.
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sophiaazhou Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013

hello,
I just wanted you to know I find your work beautiful, so I featured it here. :heart:
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katarthis Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Found in Wordsmiths.

(Frank Miller via Batman said "You're likely to stay concious all the way down". After 9-11, I shudder to think of it. Falling has always been my bigger fear.)

k
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011  Student Writer
This is so beautiful, in a sad, well thought out way... amazing detail and style.
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much. :heart:
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Student Writer
No problem!
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bangingonkeyboards Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011  Student Writer
that's absolutely stunning. wow.
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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phantomatthewindow Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011
that's a really high bridge
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:iconwh1t3-n0153:
WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It really is. I get kind of freaked out whenever I walk across it.
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wh0rem0ans Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011
jumping always sounds fun ... letting go is not fun for most people.
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RawPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Photographer
Intriguing observation, this piece really has an impact. :clap:
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :heart:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link] Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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Poelee Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011
oh my god this is amazing
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:iconwh1t3-n0153:
WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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fragilecarapace Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011
amaazing..
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :]
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fragilecarapace Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011
Welcome :)
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W0rdkeeper Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2011
I almost cried reading this.
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:iconwh1t3-n0153:
WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Takes a man to admit being touched by a poem. Thank you so much for sharing, broski; I love knowing it had an impact. :]
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jaspiir Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
And sometimes
I can't stop reading

because I feel like if I do
maybe you'll stop
writing, too

and then what?

there'd be silence,
because one of the greatest
most talented
voices [or screams]
had been silenced.

never stop.

<3

beauty
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your kind words. They're encouraging. :heart:
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failkat Featured By Owner May 13, 2011   General Artist
this is amazing :)
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:iconwh1t3-n0153:
WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner May 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :]
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failkat Featured By Owner May 16, 2011   General Artist
You're welcome!!
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insomaniac55 Featured By Owner May 10, 2011   Writer
Two things:

1. Why the specific number? I know it's an odd question to ask but I wanted to know if it was an actual fact or an estimation of sorts.

2. This was insta- :+fav: the moment I read it. I love the style, the imagery, the choices of words ("two-many-footsteps long" was a nice touch), the whole damn thing. I'd like to post this up on the blog for Cram Magazine, an arts and lit publication/blog I run. Would that be cool with you?
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insomaniac55 Featured By Owner May 11, 2011   Writer
Oh I'll definitely put your name up. Is there any more info you'd like to put up (brief bio, website, etc.)?
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:iconwh1t3-n0153:
WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner May 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Nope, nothing more really. Thanks a ton. It's good to see literature publications are still alive. :]
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whimsy657 Featured By Owner May 9, 2011  Student General Artist
this is amazing. its so dark and creepy but you wrote it so well you just wanted to keep reading because it was real. does that make sense?
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner May 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect sense. Thank you. :heart:
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