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17 miles from the
town I grew up in,
there was a river, and a
bridge
a hundred heart-jumps above it:

too-many-thousand
footsteps long,
with a walkway to the side that
didn't feel wide enough.

Cars would
VREEOOWMM
by at
59 miles-an-hour, as
with each nervous step, your feet
prayed to the concrete,

and cold wind would beat
at you between
green, rusted rails,
just to remind you how high up
you really were.



   Every once in a while,
   there would be news that
   someone had "jumped".   
                     
   

They'd
walked out to the middle
[or just where it looked high enough],
with the wind colder
than usual and the
concrete
feeling solid for once,

they'd put their hands on the
green-rust rails,
covered in lovers' etched
prayers to time,

they'd gripped tight onto it
as they lifted one leg,
then the other,
over to the unsafe side.

and they'd stood there, bent,
with their back to the
world, looking down
in terror,
but in hope.

  

   Sometimes they got talked down.
   Sometimes they didn't.      
                  
   

I did the math one day and
figured it took
6 . 7 4 6 1 seconds
for a human being to
drop
all that way
from top to bottom.

6 . 7 4 6 1 seconds
of panic and wind
ravaging your frame.
6 . 7 4 6 1 seconds
of double-guesses
and what-ifs.

And they said the terror killed most people
mid-flight, before the
body even
touched
the water.
when you thought about it
it was more of a
scared letting-go
than a jump.


```

. April 2011 .
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vivapo Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
I can't believe I found this poem today. A childhood friend of mine jumped off her balcony yesterday. I'll never know what went through her mind during those last seconds, but man, I hope there was something else underneath all the pain and fear... Maybe even hope. Thanks for writing this.
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NightWings99 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student General Artist
I love this poem. It's so beautifully dark. The descriptions and the way you present everything make it feel like you're really there at the bridge.
Congratulations on the DD. You've earned it.
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Andrid-Darkbane Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is...amazing. Beautiful but depressing at the same time. The feeling of this poem is amazingly strong, and I could almost feel the weightlessness of falling. Very nice.
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erfdog10 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
hm... wow. this is seriously amazing. I wasn't sure where you were going with it, looking at the title... but... wow. this is impressive, no kidding. loved it.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student General Artist
Wowwwww..... it has the feel of a true story. :hug: It's amazingly good.
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toxichydramonster Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
this is soo sad and depressing. :C but so well writin
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Congratzplz Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student Writer
this is really beautiful
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This poem is so powerful - the words and tone are like a quiet admission; the format is like someone leaning out from the rails.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredible. I really miss reading your words. It makes me happy to see that your incredible work is still getting attention. I wish you'd come back to dA but hope you're doing well.

Congrats on the DD. 

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